Loneliness

Melancholic Wisdom

I definitely felt this one, the pain is being alone can be one the deepest pits you can find yourself in. That's why I try so hard to be people's friend, hell sometimes I'm their only friend, because I never want anyone else to experience that type of pain. Well done, Brian!

Prism Persona

I am glad you posted this. I also hope she comes your way and that she loves you so much that you’ll forget ever feeling this way! A deep, personal poem. Thank you again for sharing it.

Tyrone Shoelaces

Very emotional and moving....

Nne

sad but true

Flambe

Definitely relatable for me, some people say they rather be alone, but its not what they think it is

Derina Peng

I loved the lost six lines on how you deal with the loneliness which many people have. Tell what you feel. Thank you for this posting.

CuriousOne

Beautiful and very moving.

KIT 78

Good.

KatV

Good poem. It is so true that we don't let someone know how we feel, we may lose them. And, the price of that might be loneliness.
My only suggestion would be to change "lonely" to "alone" in your first line. Nobody wants to be lonely; some people want to be alone.
So, to me, "Being alone isn't what it's all cracked up to be" might be a more accurate line.
Good work! Write on! : )

Harry Little

It is true that in loneliness we are free. But still we feel like to chat with somebody or have someone with us. A nice poem.

ASHamilton

KatV

Brian, you are writing a beautiful poem here. I can feel all your emotion wrapped up in it. The bones are good, but the rhyme feels forced. Writing in rhyme is so, so hard. I want to share some advice that someone on here gave me (I can't remember who): Try reading your poem out loud several times. Focus on where it isn't rolling smoothly. That's where you need to make adjustments.

For example, I keep fumbling over how to read the 4th line. So, maybe I would try to cut it back without losing my idea. Maybe, something like, "But it sure would be nice to hear her voice next to me or on the phone"

When you edit words out to help the flow, make sure you don't lose your thought or feeling. Find the words that are duplicating your thought. For example, in your 7th line, "One day" and "there will be a time" have the exact same meaning. I think both work equally well. So, if your flow gets stuck here, you can omit one of them.

Someone gave me more good advice on here, and I want to share it with you: sometimes it helps to just write write write, and then go back and work rhyme into it.

Just my thoughts. Take what you need and leave the rest. But remember ....
You have a beautiful poem here. It's sad and from the heart. Love it!
Keep writing. Write....Write....Write.

M.L.Williamson Hume

Thank you for expressing what I feel everyday.

Pink Wish

I am glad that you have published this very touching and true and well-put poem about loneliness, this severe personal problem. You have done a great job and putting those hard words down in a way we all can relate to.

Hans Sigurd Lillegard

I liked the imagery. I also liked the rhyme scheme.

Clare Troup

Lovely I can understand.
If she is not with everyone you should tell her how you feel. I came out off a 10 years relationship and now I know I love someone but they have a partner and I can’t say nothing but I feel we have chemistry but I have to just get on with me and if it will be it will be .
If she is also alone you should tell her .

Eraser

Loneliness is tough. Sometimes I like to be alone and do my own thing but it does get old. Humans are meant to interact and be social. You captured this nicely in your poem.

Rob73

Being lonely or alone is terrible.
Great emotionally written poem.

r.b. tetro

simply heartfelt and true

charliemmurph

Great poem! So true!