Paul v4

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Paul and Crystal Fenn are blessed with superpowers by none other than Santa Claus himself. As they explore the possibilities, they uncover truths about the world around them, and about each other.

Young Adult supernatural ya

Chapter 1

Potatoes and Wishes

The Fenn Family was eating dinner on a cold winter evening. None of them spoke. Richard Fenn, a tall burly man, h... Read Chapter

Chapter 2

Experimentation and Precision

Doyanne deadpanned Paul. He avoided her sharp eyes, staring at the table. “What did you say?” Doyanne asked.... Read Chapter

Chapter 3

Deer

Ruby and the other kids were stunned. Mr. Potter looked around, jaw dropped. He was a large balding man. The dean of the school. ... Read Chapter

Chapter 4

Crazy Kids

Richard raised his head. He was standing on a construction site. Someone was calling his name. “You hear what’s going on?” Anot... Read Chapter

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FromBlackToViloet

Hello, I really like how you set up the dialogue here. You could already tell there was tension between the characters. I like how you showed through their actions the different feelings they felt. It looked like a regular dinner, but more than meets the eyes. I wish santa clause would give me powers. I would so want like invisibitly or talk to animals. I like how you present the personalities btw Crystal and paul, you can tell their siblings lol. Also when you give the desrcptions what the character's look like, sometimes more like subtle hints, instead of saying what hair color or so they are. Like imply more how the siblings differ from appearance maybe. Overall, you have a good built up with the characters, like their interactions are clear and concise. There were some few grammar errors, I sort of pointed out, but it did not take away from the story. Really good start so far!:}

Tue, April 12th, 2022 1:39am