Whisper loud?
By: Stephanie Lebreton
Whisper loud?
By: Stephanie Lebreton
Just whisper louder, louder
The night won't wait much longer
Please can you tell me what's on your mind tonight
?
Just touch me softer, softer
The rain won't sway much farther
Run to the stars and lead me to the light
?
My heart beats, heart beats faster
One look and I feel stronger
Heart stops when you're looking at me
So come now
let go
fall down
We'll fly
?
Just stretch your hand, I'll draw near
you've managed to lock my fear
Do you know how it feels to feel you here
?
Sh, sh, sh, no sound right now
you might break the mold somehow
The song of love isn't sung with words right now
?
The moon shines, moon shines brighter
I can't help but fall deeper
Breath catches when you're holding on me
can't help
but smile
don't let
me go
?
Don't cry my precious, my dear
Don't run off and hide in fear
no broken heart can't mend itself through love
?
Just kiss me harder, harder
We'll run off farther, farther
& life together can't disappoint us here
?
Just hold me, hold me tighter,
The last word spoken and heard,
spirit melts when you're smiling at me
laugh loud
break free
heart flies
we live
Submitted: June 22, 2008
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Comments
Wow. I loved how you repeated the words in the first lines of each stanza. Also, you really captured the emotion. BRAVO!!
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 12:51am
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hehe, thanks dearie:P
Sun, June 22nd, 2008 6:42pm
WOW!! what an amazing love poem!! I loved it and thought that every single stanza was amazing!! wow steph im impressed, wow, wait didn't I say that already!!
ITS JUST I LOVE THIS SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO MUCH!!
right!! good day!
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hehe, yaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaayyy, lmao. thanks so much dearie:P
Sun, June 22nd, 2008 6:26pm
Yearning for love and attention from her/his lover.
"The song of love isn't sung with words right now"
No words have to be said. Just his/her presence is enough for that moment.
"spirit melts when you're smiling at me"
True love or need from the lover.
A very enticing love poem, stephhlebreton. I really enjoyed it.
ILI vote.
Take care
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awww, thanks so much, it means alot comming from you!
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 8:57am
You always have such fun presentation! :) I love how it all looks, and the poem itself was magnificent. I adored it, just as much as I adore YOU!!! :) lol.
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 2:11am
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aww angela, I dore you too:) hehe, thanks, I like making things look nice, lmao.... merci beaucoup ma belle!
Very good and I agree with Angela that it is a cute presentation
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 2:49am
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hehe, thkanks:P
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 8:53am
I love you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I mean I love it XD
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hehehe, luv you too peanut! lmao. thanks soo much!
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 8:51am
gah! steph - cette poem, c'est tres tres tres belle! je l'aime! tu es incroyable! tres bien ma belle - tres tres bien! deux ... thumbs... up.
hahahaha XD
keep up the wonderful writing :)
oo one more thing - u had a few spelling mistakes, so watch out for those ma belle ^^
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just fixed em:) hehehe, merci beaucoup ma chere alice, hehe. ton point de vu sur mon ecriture est importante pour moi!
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 8:50am
Stephy this poem was absolutely beautiful.... keep up the good writing
very good critique
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awww, yay! I'm glad you liked it:) thanks so much:)
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 8:41am
yes, I really liked the repeating words also. It was almost like someone trying to calm someone else down. Really lovely poem steph! p.s. a bunch of typos you might want to look at ;)
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 1:31pm
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haha, thanks for letting me know. I'll get on that
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 8:40am
"The song of love isn't sung with words right now"
OOoo I love it....reading...
Your so romantic and creative...(dreamy smiles*)
Steph I hope you take this as a compliment because it IS one, I am amazed at how well you are able to write now; You are going to be one fantastic writer some day:) Your writing is comming along nicely, well done.
'I LIKE'd IT'
~rain
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awwww, you're so sweet:) hehe, you just made my day, THANK YOU sooooooooo very much rain:)
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 8:37am
I liked it too, although not quite as dark as I would like it. still good though.
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 4:08pm
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don't write dark stuff. I'm too happy for it. but thanks.
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 12:17pm
wow, just the title alone "whisper loud" is so lovely. the poem definately didn't disapoint. well done!
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glad to hear it! thanks so much charpie:)
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 12:16pm
I really like the repetition in this poem, Steph. "Just kiss me harder, harder/ We'll run off farther, farther/ & life together can't disappoint us here." I loved those lines!! I've only read a few of your poems, but this one is definitely my favorite so far. Very romantic and sweet, but not mushy or sappy at all lol.
Couple spelling mistakes... 7th stanza "disapoint" should be "disappoint" and last stanza "fly's" should be "flies."
I thought this was a beautiful poem, Steph.
Stephanee :)
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awww, thanks very very much. p.s, LOVE your name;)
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 12:16pm
wow steph thats amazing, especialy when you\me lol sing it. good job sis lol.
-em
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lmao, shit singers on us!!!! haha, thanks em
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 12:15pm
Oh my God this is soooo good! I haven't been actually doing much on booksie lately, but this has inspired me to go on more! I'm so happy! The whole poem was really good and to me sounded like a song. Some stanza's really sounded like a chorus to some song to me.
Of course I'll be clicking the "I like it" button, who wouldn't??? I also love the pictures you put on this too, so the whole thing was awesomeful!
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okay, same comment twice, lol. I hate it when booksie screws up, lol. (:
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 12:14pm
Oh my God this is soooo good! I haven't been actually doing much on booksie lately, but this has inspired me to go on more! I'm so happy! The whole poem was really good and to me sounded like a song. Some stanza's really sounded like a chorus to some song to me.
Of course I'll be clicking the "I like it" button, who wouldn't??? I also love the pictures you put on this too, so the whole thing was awesomeful!
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funny you should think it sounds like a song cuz that's exactly what it is, lol. thanks soooo very much!
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 12:11pm
fall down
We'll fly
The rain won't sway much farther
Run to the stars and lead me to the light
?
no broken heart can't mend itself through love
Just stretch your hand, I'll draw near
you've managed to lock my fear
STEPH, STEPH....I have no words to describe how I am feeling now after reading this
*RELIEVED*....i think this is the MAGIC OF UR WRITINGS ON ME ALWAYS....
GOD BLESS U Honey and I feel as if GOD's blessing in always on YOU ....
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you are too nice, lol. thanks so much, always thank you. god bless you as well:)
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 12:10pm
Aww, this was a beautiful and powerful poem. It holds so much meaning, and touched me. I loved it so much, very nice job. ^^
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 9:22pm
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awww, thanks very much, glad you liked it bella!
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 2:24pm
Very nice poem. I can tell that it comes rom the heart. You have a great talent with poetry. Great Job. :)
Mon, June 23rd, 2008 9:41pm
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thanks so very much!
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Mon, June 23rd, 2008 12:02ami abostolutly love this poem.
one of my favorites.
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merci merci:)
Sun, June 22nd, 2008 5:40pm