Space Samurai

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Having written a full blown novel has helped a lot with learning how to deliver information in tight packages. Sometimes you need the fleeting images to make a more meaningful impact. I do intend to develop this story further. The tone to this narrative is a bit different than my other works as it has a bit more serious background that needs to evolve. My inspiration for it comes from several genres being brought together, hopefully for something really good and unique.

I wouldn't say Jack is happy-go-lucky but his mannerism is meant to be a bit off the cuff as it's referred to in some speech. Sort of a go with the flow type of character.

Incite: the phrase "See ya later, Space cowboy." was a line rolling in my head when I first thought up the idea. Also, the title is not set in stone. I'm currently trying to hash out a better title, though. Space Samurai is a tad to generic but it helps me focus my idea cause that's what my character is intended to be--a space samurai in cowboy garb.

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Thanks for the read, IIywrch.

First of all the dragon and the katana are only remotely tied to each other at the moment. I'm working on a setup that brings their plot point together in a more profound way. But you do have me thinking about changing it up a little with that suggestion.

As for the sand dune feel you got, you're half right. I never mention any dunes. So, what would that really suggest to you about that desert? 1) It might not be massive enough to be populated by huge sand dunes. 2) The region of desert Jack is in has underlying rock. The dunes where he's at would only be about a foot deep, maybe two on a high wind cycle. Also, he wasn't in the deep desert of Nar'chu more of a medium region where rock quarries and Scarven worms inhabit. I'll have to map out my world a bit more to develop its detailed settings.

Moving on to vegetation. I am aware that deserts have more vegetation than I describe in my initial chapter. I was a touch more focused on character setup than scenery. So, I gave a brief glimpse of it rather than bog down the exposition with heavy scene description.

I'll give the gear listing scene another look. I may be able to make it more organic. Duster, yes! I thought it had another name but I didn't dig into the fashion enough to pull that one out. Thanks for that info. I had a vision just not the wording.

The Aquos. This beauty is a cave oasis, of sorts. In my vision of this formation, they are natural rock formations on Kharm, and they are more prevalent in the desert region. The caves are small mostly, rising up above ground level only several feet. Some can be bigger. Thorny Kraut is the main vegetation that grows near it with sprigs of other grasses and some small trees sometimes growing over or covering the opening. I didn't get into high detail with it because I wasn't sure how I wanted to describe it at the time. I've since worked out how they should be taken visually. They basically work by capturing moisture in the air and funneling it into a basin at the back. The basins are man-made mostly by the natives of Kharm.

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That phrase was meant to be a personal thought by the MC. It looks like I forgot to italicize it when converting it over to the site. It still reads as an insert of a certain degree, but it should be better read that way, I think.

And yeah, I do go into quite a bit of detail kinda quickly in this first chapter. Some of it will probably get repeated but not everything unless I decide to pull those elements around a bit. I'm trying to stay character driven with this more than scenic.

Thanks for the read and comment. Appreciate the fan and the shelving. I'll do my best to get back to this story in the near future been working on a major one for quite a while.